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Overall: There are three uses of the word "in" here, making it sound redundant. I would suggest taking out the "in" before "the first concert", since it does not really need a place there. Otherwise, the article is new enough, long enough, just under copyvio per Earwig, and has a well-licensed and clear photo. Locust member (talk) 02:55, 4 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you for the review! I'm not a native speaker of English, and in German we would need something to clarify that "concert" doesn't refer to the piece or the orchestra. I'm fine without it if you tell me that English is different. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 14:15, 4 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
No problem, and I understand that; I reread the hook a couple of times and I came up with this to not lose meaning, if I may suggest: "... that in 1994, Kazuyoshi Akiyama(pictured) conducted the Tokyo Symphony Orchestra in Schoenberg's Moses und Aron, during the first concert of the work with Japanese performers?
Thank you for the offer. I think that it puts a stress on the year as if it was of special importance, which I'd understand in the case of a centenary, but I may be wrong. You might still approve this because it doesn't change te meaning. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 17:01, 6 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Hmm, that is true. Does "... that Kazuyoshi Akiyama conducted the Tokyo Symphony Orchestra in Schoenberg's Moses und Aron in 1994, marking the first performance of the work by Japanese musicians?" work?
Thank you for that offer, but I'm not sure what and how something is "marked" here. How is this:
There are three uses of the word "in" here, making it sound redundant. I would suggest taking out the "in" before "the first concert", since it does not really need a place there. Otherwise, the article is new enough, long enough, just under copyvio per Earwig, and has a well-licensed and clear photo. Locust member (talk) 02:55, 4 February 2025 (UTC)