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Cherry on Top (Bini song)

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I am nominating to peer review again because I really wanna push this on FAC. This is the second time that I nominated this, and nominated twice on FAC. Your suggestions and changes it will help on me. Thanks! ROY is WAR Talk! 10:30, 21 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Royiswariii: According to the peer review guidelines, nominations are limited to one open request per editor. You currently have two peer reviews open at the same time, with this one and with the one for "Tamang Panahon". Please make sure to fully close one of these reviews. Instructions for doing this can be found on the guideline page. Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 15:24, 22 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
I withdrawn my nomination on Tamang Panahon, so I can focus here. ROY is WAR Talk! 00:02, 23 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Arconning

group's milestone, "milestone" is a bit puffy. "Distinction" could be better.
Skylar Mones and composed by Boy Matthews, Gaby Ramirez, Shintaro Yasuda, and Skylar Mones., Mones' first name doesn't have to be repeated.
On November 10, the Los Angeles Clippers dance team, Clippers Spirit, performed "Cherry on Top" during the halftime show of the NBA game between the Toronto Raptors and LA Clippers., specify the date. Other media could probably include covers of the song that are notable (i.e. in news articles).
The fair use image highlighting PonteFino Residences doesn't have a proper license, with its "Minimal use" section in its summary saying, "It will be minimal by making the article a better quality." This should probably be either removed or replaced with an image with proper licensing.
...the song's title, and sign language is incorporated during the chorus., could specify which sign language if mentioned. The flow of the sentence towards "... and sign language..." doesn't make grammatical sense so that should be fixed through rewording.
on the Top Philippine Songs., remove "the".
The accolades section could use some text. Dates of their nomination, the dates/which ceremony they were awarded on, etc.\
- Here are my comments so far, will comment further on. Arconning (talk) 14:23, 25 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, Arconning! Thank you for your reviewing this article.

"milestone" is a bit puffy. "Distinction" could be better. Done ROY is WAR Talk! 08:32, 27 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Skylar Mones and composed by Boy Matthews, Gaby Ramirez, Shintaro Yasuda, and Skylar Mones., Mones' first name doesn't have to be repeated. Done ROY is WAR Talk! 08:32, 27 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
On November 10, the Los Angeles Clippers dance team, Clippers Spirit, performed "Cherry on Top" during the halftime show of the NBA game between the Toronto Raptors and LA Clippers., specify the date. Other media could probably include covers of the song that are notable (i.e. in news articles). I don't understand what you're saying is about "specify dates", it is already added as "On November 10". ROY is WAR Talk! 08:32, 27 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
The fair use image highlighting PonteFino Residences doesn't have a proper license, with its "Minimal use" section in its summary saying, "It will be minimal by making the article a better quality." This should probably be either removed or replaced with an image with proper licensing. I removed it because I don't know how will I fix that. ROY is WAR Talk! 08:32, 27 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
...the song's title, and sign language is incorporated during the chorus., could specify which sign language if mentioned. The flow of the sentence towards "... and sign language..." doesn't make grammatical sense so that should be fixed through rewording. They don't specify what sign language they used, however some expert on sign language saying it is a Filipino sign language but I did not add that since there is no source and it may be a original research. ROY is WAR Talk! 08:32, 27 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
on the Top Philippine Songs., remove "the". Done ROY is WAR Talk! 08:32, 27 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
The accolades section could use some text. Dates of their nomination, the dates/which ceremony they were awarded on, etc. ~~Working~~ Done. ROY is WAR Talk! 08:32, 27 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

I'll update you if I done on accolades section. ROY is WAR Talk! 08:32, 27 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Royiswariii Specify as in what year the event was held, as the site is an encyclopedia it should specify which November as information like that will be outdated in a year or so.

multiple awards from diffrent, wrong spelling.
For the accolades section, the mention of the song placing in the listicle made by Rolling Stone should be mentioned in the prose as well.
Should probably be added: The song topped iTunes' charts,[1] a Christmas remix of the song has been made,[2] dance covers made by Unis and SB19 (placed in the other media section)/[3][4]

Arconning (talk) 13:41, 28 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

NØ

"Star Music released on July 11, 2024 as the first pre-single for the upcoming extended play Biniverse." - There is a missing word here. It is not clear what Star Music released.
"The song also gained significant attention on YouTube Philippines, becoming the top trending music video and reaching two million views within 24 hours of its release." - The linked article is just about YouTube in general and not YouTube in Philippines, so the pipe is misleading. Also, doesn't the Philippines use the global YouTube site, and not a different one that is just for them? So it is not clear what is meant here.
"The song has received three accolades, including the Music Video of the Year at the Myx Music Awards." - No need to provide an exact number for the amount of accolades unless one directly appears in a secondary source. There is also no need for "the" in "the Music Video of the Year"
You could include the release year for Talaarawan.
"Following the successful promotion of Talaarawan" - What do you mean by "the successful promotion"? Is this a characterization from a secondary source?
There is additional information about the mixing, mastering, etc. personnel in the Credits and personnel section that isn't present in the article body.
"Bini became the first international artist after the K-pop group Exo to have a song previewed in the Superstar game series." - Neither is an "artist" as they are bands of multiple people
Have you thought about merging the "Critical reception" and "Commercial performance" sections into a combined "Reception" section? They are very small currently.
Add captions to the chart table.
I am also not sure about the "In other media" section as that looks like it could easily be merged into one of the others due to its size.--N Ø 10:25, 26 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, NØ! Thank you for your reviewing my nomination.

There is a missing word here. It is not clear what Star Music released. Done, you can suggest to adjust the word if you want. ROY is WAR Talk! 02:26, 28 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
The linked article is just about YouTube in general and not YouTube in Philippines, so the pipe is misleading. Also, doesn't the Philippines use the global YouTube site, and not a different one that is just for them? So it is not clear what is meant here. I removed the wikilink. Also, according to Rappler (ref 31), Cherry on Top was recognized as the number two music video on YouTube Philippines. ROY is WAR Talk! 02:26, 28 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
"The song has received three accolades, including the Music Video of the Year at the Myx Music Awards." - No need to provide an exact number for the amount of accolades unless one directly appears in a secondary source. There is also no need for "the" in "the Music Video of the Year"
You could include the release year for Talaarawan. Where can I add that? ROY is WAR Talk! 02:26, 28 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
"Following the successful promotion of Talaarawan" - What do you mean by "the successful promotion"? Is this a characterization from a secondary source? ref 6 from Billboard Philippines. ROY is WAR Talk! 02:26, 28 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
There is additional information about the mixing, mastering, etc. personnel in the Credits and personnel section that isn't present in the article body. I have second thought for this whether should I cite the apple music on Composition and lyrics to add the producers of the song. What do you think? ROY is WAR Talk! 02:26, 28 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Neither is an "artist" as they are bands of multiple people rewording to group. I am also thinking it can be a girl group or Filipino girl group. ROY is WAR Talk! 02:26, 28 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Have you thought about merging the "Critical reception" and "Commercial performance" sections into a combined "Reception" section? They are very small currently. Yes. Done. You can still suggest to adjust the section if you want. ROY is WAR Talk! 02:26, 28 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Add captions to the chart table. Done per above reviewer. ROY is WAR Talk! 02:26, 28 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
I am also not sure about the "In other media" section as that looks like it could easily be merged into one of the others due to its size. I agree, it can be added to Reception or Promotion and release? ROY is WAR Talk! 02:26, 28 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Note:I am also struggling on the Compostion and lyrics were "Featuring "playful and confident" lyrics, the song embraces themes of uniqueness, tackling the "unique personality of a person that one could never get enough [of]".". Bini did not mention behind that song. However, they what Cherry on top means which is quoted and also on BroadwayWorld, although it is unreliable, but it can be considered since it was an interview per WP:ABOUTSELF. What do you think? ROY is WAR Talk! 02:26, 28 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]