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The article was archived by Gog the Mild via FACBot (talk) 10 February 2025 [1].

2024 World Snooker Championship

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Nominator(s): Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:29, 11 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about the 2024 edition of the World Snooker Championship. Kyren Wilson won this event. Has deserved a big win for some time and bossed this event. Jak Jones was a qualifier but destroyed the competition until he ran out of puff in the final.

I look forward to any responses you have Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:29, 11 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

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All are own work, expect the non-free image, which is taken from the event website (and mentioned as the source, along with the organising body as the author). All images are correctly licensed, and the article seems to meet the FAC on a semi-comprehensive read, so a support from me. DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 17:47, 14 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Rodney Baggins

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I've made a few edits of my own and these are the other things I've noticed.

  • I think use of {{nbh}} for hyphenation is overblown, e.g. "Second{{nbh}}round matches" in Format section leaves massive space for me at end of previous line for no good reason. The article is full of them and on closer inspection, they are not even standard hyphens so you can't search on them – try copying across into a text file and you end up with a strange dash character that isn't actually a standard hyphen. I would strongly advise getting rid of these and using normal hyphens (allowing hyphenated words to break across lines). I'm fine with using {{nbnd}} in scores, that's a great idea, but hard hyphens is a step too far for me.
  • I've noticed odd wording at start of each round section. Suggest the following changes:
    "as the best of 19 frames was played over two sessions" > "as the best-of-19-frames match was played over two sessions"
    "as the best of 25 frames was played over three sessions" > "as the best-of-25-frames match was played over three sessions" (x2)
    "as the best of 33 frames was played over four sessions" > "as the best-of-33-frames match was played over four sessions"
    "as the best of 35 frames was played over four sessions" > "as the best-of-35-frames match was played over four sessions"

Lead

  • I've given the lead section a bit of a copyedit. What do you think about combining paras 3 & 4 to make the lead just three paragraphs in total? Para 3 is very short, and I think it might also be worth taking out "On his way to the final," which seems quite redundant, so para 3 would be even shorter then!
  • "at the English Institute of Sport, also in Sheffield" > (simply) "at the English Institute of Sport in Sheffield"
  • "worldwide" seems like an odd choice of word – implies that it was broadcast the world over! Could we change that to "overseas" or "in other countries" or even "outside the UK"?

Prize fund

  • Suggest putting Total: £2,395,000 in bold, because at the moment it gets swallowed up by all the other figures and it needs to stand out as it's the total of the others. (I've often thought this in other tournament articles but never mentioned it until now.)
  • Final sentence is unsourced: "Xu was defeated by Alfie Burden in qualifying, Ding was beaten by Jack Lisowski in the first round, and Allen was defeated by John Higgins in the second round." I think this sentence can come out as it looks like an afterthought.

Fourth qualification round

  • Heathcote/Bingham match is verified by ref.56 but not "Heathcote was ahead 8‍–‍7 but missed a pot on the pink that would have opened up a two-frame lead" which needs a separate source.

First round

  • Brecel needs to be in full as Luca Brecel, and why is he not wikilinked? Other players are linked at first mention in Main stage.

Second round

  • Use full names at first mention: Milkins > Robert Milkins; Gilbert > David Gilbert; Trump > Judd Trump; Murphy > Shaun Murphy; Maguire > Stephen Maguire; O'Sullivan > Ronnie O'Sullivan; O'Connor > Joe O'Connor; Bingham > Stuary Bingham; Lisowski > Jack Lisowski
  • Do we really need the bracketed [Higgins] in quoted text at end? It's blinking obvious who Allen's talking about!

Quarter-finals

  • Use full names at first mention: Trump > Judd Trump; Gilbert > David Gilbert; Maguire > Stephen Maguire; O'Sullivan > Ronnie O'Sullivan; Bingham > Stuart Bingham
  • "didn't win another frame" – remove contraction, e.g. "Trump, however, did not win another frame and was defeated 9‍–13."
  • "top‑16 status in the World Rankings" > "top-16 status in the world rankings" (no caps needed, see elsewhere in article)

Final

  • "Jak Jones's first ranking final" – possible to get rid of the awkward s's by rearranging the phrasing: "This was Kyren Wilson's third Triple Crown final; he had previously finished runner-up at the 2018 Masters and the 2020 World Snooker Championship. Jak Jones was appearing in his first ranking final, his previous best being a solitary semi‑final at the 2022 Gibraltar Open."
  • Is it necessary to state who Kyren lost to in his previous finals? (see wording above)
  • The word 'solitary' sounds a bit negative, maybe change to "his previous best being a semi‑final appearance at the 2022 Gibraltar Open."
  • "someone had led 7‍–‍0" > "a finalist had led 7‍–‍0"
  • Not every sentence is sourced, e.g. "Trailing by six frames, Jones made breaks of 75 and 56 to trail 3‍–‍7." Maybe combine sentences using semi-colons if all verified by same source?
  • "final frame" (x2) – what's wrong with "last frame"? The match is the 'final' so this might confuse the layperson. Same with "final session" (x2) and close repetition of latter.
  • "to force Wilson to lay snookers to win. Wilson successfully got the snooker" > "to leave Wilson needing snookers to win. He successfully laid the snooker" (and maybe cuegloss snooker again at this critical point in the commentary!)
  • "Jak [Jones] played really well tonight" – do we really need the bracketed [Jones] in quote? It's blinking obvious who Kyren's talking about!
  • I'd like to see an alternative source for the final score, e.g. this: [2] The second WST source is a dead link so it would be useful to replace it with this Guardian article.

Image captions

  • O'Brien caption has awkward juxtaposition of players' names. Suggest something like "Fergal O'Brien (pictured) retired from the professional tour (which he had first joined in 1991) after his 8‍–‍10 loss to Mostafa Dorgham."
  • Robertson image: suggest simplifying caption from "The 2010 champion, Neil Robertson, failed to qualify for the event for the first time in twenty years." to "Neil Robertson failed to qualify for the event for the first time in twenty years." and then change in body text: "Former winner Neil Robertson failed to qualify..." > "The 2010 champion, Neil Robertson, failed to qualify..."
  • We have "Fergal O'Brien (pictured)" in italics, but "Joe O'Connor (pictured in 2017)" not in italics. We need one or the other, for consistency.
  • David Gilbert caption: need to add in score for consistency?
  • Jak Jones caption needs bracketed 'pictured' for consistency because it also mentions Stuart Bingham (I think that's the logic of it, right?) Also, need to add in score for consistency?
  • Higgins caption: "to retain his top 16 position in the world rankings." doesn't sound right to me. Maybe try "to retain his top-16 status"? (needs hyphen too)
  • Maybe expand Wilson caption: "Kyren Wilson (pictured) won his first World Championship by defeating Jak Jones 18‍–‍14 in the final."

Refs

  • BBC refs.135 & 137 are dup cites (second one has correct title) [3]
  • Some of the Eurosport citations need updated titles. Refs 98, 99, 103, 124, 134, 138 have wrong article title.
  • Eurosport refs 98 & 124 also have missing authors
  • Independent ref.104 has been updated, title needs changing + archive reflects old version and also needs updating.
  • Sporting Life ref.133 has updated title.
  • For the BBC Sport citations, and others, I wouldn't mind if you want to remove loads of work links in the refs. I agree with you that it leads to a SOB issue.

Finally, the introductory paragraphs in Qualifying draw and Main draw could do with a bit of tidying up, which I can look at for you if you like.
Rodney Baggins (talk) 00:07, 17 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for this, Rodney. Your copyedits look grand. I'll work my way through this. Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:39, 17 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Coordinator note

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This has been open for three weeks and has yet to pick up a support. Unless it attracts considerable movement towards a consensus to promote over the next three or four days I am afraid that it is liable to be archived. Gog the Mild (talk) 10:59, 1 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry but this does not seem to be moving towards a consensus to promote, so I am going to have archive it. The usual two-week hiatus will apply. Gog the Mild (talk) 14:23, 10 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
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