User:Bluejay5151/Stan Shih/Arcticrobot0612 Peer Review

General info

Whose work are you reviewing?

Magnetoluvr, Hellohello1930, Cauliflowersails910, Blueponytail, Bluejay5151

Link to draft you're reviewing
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): Stan Shih

Evaluate the drafted changes

Hi! Here's my peer review for you:

Lead

Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? - The lead remains unchanged, so if you are still working on it, you can add a note on your draft page stating that you're working on this area.
Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? - I think that with the new paragraphs you added, it would be great to edit the introductory sentence to include some of the new information.
Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? - The lead could definitely use some information that summarizes the career developments and personal philosophy that you added.
Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? - So far, it is concise, but as I said before, it could use some additional information.

Content

Is the content added relevant to the topic? - Yes! It looks like you added a section called "Early Life" and incorporated educational information in that section, separating it out from the renamed section "Involvement in Acer". I also see that you added two more sections below that are called "Awards and achievements" and "Personal social responsibility: career, philanthropy, and advocacy", all of them with citations. All of them are relevant to the topic in question, especially the early life section; it chronologically orders the information presented, which aligns with many other biographical articles on Wikipedia.
Is the content added up-to-date? - Yes! The articles you've added are fairly recent (from 2020-2025).
Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? - Having some information about his family might be helpful - the previous version had information on his wife but since that got removed, it would be useful to include that. I think the last section could use some more citations, especially the ones talking about their personal philosophy.

Tone and Balance

Is the content added neutral? - Mostly, yes; in the personal life section, the first paragraph, as well as the beginning of the second paragraph might have certain biases, e.g. in the phrase, "His commitment to PSR is evident even in his leadership..." I am confused as to what PSR is, as well as the wording itself being an advocate for the person in question. You can reword that sentence to say, "Shih took a heavy pay cut along with his senior colleagues due to 'his personal social responsibility, not his investment.'" to add more clarity and keep its tone neutral. Similarly, you can shorten the introductory sentence in the third paragraph; from "Shih’s passion for social good continues to drive his philanthropic efforts. For instance, he has established the “Stan Shih Foundation” which fosters initiatives aimed at social impact and community development in Taiwan," you can shorten it to, "Shih also established the “Stan Shih Foundation” which fosters initiatives aimed at social impact and community development in Taiwan."
Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? So far, yes! The additions added in the first two sections are mostly neutral; some sentences in the final section may require edits. For instance, in sections discussing “personal social responsibility,” the language sometimes appears subjective (e.g., phrases such as “moral obligation” and references to deeply held Confucian values). I would highly recommend that these sentences have a more neutral tone rather than being presented as definitive statements.
Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? Not really. Although the latter part of it does tend to compliment the person quite a bit, the suggested reductions would make the content more neutral.

Sources and References

Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? - Some but not all. Here's some examples from your article where I think citations might be useful for improvements:

- "As a child, Shih was reserved and introverted. Initially, he showed a stronger interest in the liberal arts but did not excel academically." This sentence requires a citation since this seems disconnected from the next sentence, which does have a citation. You can either combine the two sentences together with the next sentences or simply exclude the information about introvertedness.

- "During his time at NCTU, Shih became more outgoing and actively participated in campus activities." Again, this has similar issues to the point mentioned above, so it is up to you on whether to include information about the individual's social skills. I wonder how relevant it is to the overall facts presented, and to what degree it is informative, so it is worth considering whether to incorporate this information at all.

- The last two sentences in the final paragraph of the "Involvement in Acer" section requires citations - it is not material that you added but I think it would be good to find citations for this information.

- The "Awards and achievements" section only contains one inline citation provided at the very end. It would be wise to add more frequent inline citations; if you can also find photos of the individual being awarded, that would be wonderful!

Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Yes - my only suggestion here would be to use sources from our class and the textbook we are reading.
Are the sources current? - Yes - you have from the 2000's.
Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible? Yes, since the scholarship referenced is written throughout different times.
Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.) - I found an article by Forbes on Stan Shih that you can reference, as well as an interview titled "Managerial Lessons From the East: An Interview With Acer's Stan Shih" that might be useful to snag quotes from. They fall under the category of news coverage and peer-reviewed articles respectively, so if you want to improve your additions, this may be useful.
Check a few links. Do they work? - Yes, most of the ones I tried out work.

Organization

Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? So far, yes! It is an easy to read article with a chronological structure that I deeply appreciate. A tip would be to read the sentences out loud in each section to sound out the transitions and see if it is natural or not. This can help to catch any errors as well.
Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? Some segments might need fixing:

- Minor spelling mistakes: "achievements" to "achievement" in the second paragraph of "Awards and achievements" and "envelop" to "envelope" in the first line of the final section.

- Expanding on the PSR acronym

Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? - Yes! The article has been compartmentalized into appropriate headings with specific details.

Overall impressions

Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? - Overall, yes! The previous version of the article had dispersed information concentrated only in the penultimate career achievements of the individual, whereas the additions show the growth of the company through the contributions of the person in question. The background information covering childhood details also acts as the missing puzzle piece of the article.
What are the strengths of the content added? Adding the "Early life" section was really key - it serves as a strong foundation for the information presented! The inclusion of the philosophy is also strong, although it does need to be fleshed out with a more neutral tone.
How can the content added be improved? Like I said previously, researching and incorporating more information about his family and neutralizing the tone concerning his philanthropy and advocacy can make the article well-balanced and thorough.

- Nawal