Talk:What a Devastating Turn of Events/GA1

GA review

Passed. Questions? four Olifanofmrtennant (she/her) 21:23, 1 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Nominator: Oltrepier (talk · contribs) 15:47, 7 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: OlifanofmrTennant (talk · contribs) 01:03, 23 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Alot of WP:LEADCITE violations
Lead seems too short

Done Thank you, I always forget about keeping citations out of the lead section... I've cut down most of them (they're all featured throughout the article, anyway), while also trying to add some more relevant details.

Background and recording

First paragraph is all one sentence, can it be broken up
"[Forestdale], [Hereford] and [Los Angeles]." makes it seem like Foresdale is a city Hereford.
Maybe worth noting that Los Angeles is in the US while the other two are in the UK

Done I've made a few adjustments and re-shuffled the second paragraph, in order to make it clearer and smoother.

Music and lyrics

That last paragraph appears to be one long sentence. Can it be broken up

Done I've tried to break up the sentence as requested; let me know how it looks now!

Release and promotion

Unpipe "Brooklyn, New York" per WP:NOTBROKEN
"Los Angeles" should be "Los Angeles, California" for constancy
Delink "Los Angeles" for consistancy

Done Does it look better now? I've also tried to improve the grammar slightly!

Critical reception

Delink "NME" for consistancy

Done It took me a minute to understand your request, but eventually I got it and complied to it! : D

Track listing

Note A seems incorrectly formatted]'

? Are you sure about that? I think it should work correctly as it is...

References

Linking is inconsistent in the ref’s. Some link publications some dont
Ref 14 seems unnecessary.
Ref 18 shouldn't be in all caps

Done I've now deleted that Warner Music Ireland citation: I just felt it wasn't necessary anymore. I actually don't remember if I added that reference to the "five fortnights" myself, but I've now moved it to make its meaning clearer. I've also tried to make ref-linking more consistent: whenever a source was repeatedly cited (e.g. The Line of Best Fit, NME), I left a link just on the first citation. Let me know if it looks better!

Misc

There seems to be too many quotes present

? Did you mean the interview quotes, or the ones in the "Critical reception" section?

@Oltrepier: that's what I found Questions? four Olifanofmrtennant (she/her) 18:21, 24 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@OlifanofmrTennant: Thank you for your review: I've tried my best at cleaning the article up and complying to your suggestions. Let me know how it looks now!

On a side note: I haven't forgot about reviewing your article, I promise... : ) Oltrepier (talk) 14:05, 28 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Generally, throughout the page there is a lot of quotes can these be paraphrased Questions? four Olifanofmrtennant (she/her) 20:27, 28 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@OlifanofmrTennant I've now trimmed down most of the quotes, as you suggested. Please let me know how you feel about it! Oltrepier (talk) 21:12, 1 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]

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