Talk:Tom Clancy's The Division 2/GA1
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Nominator: OceanHok (talk · contribs) 11:24, 3 December 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Guyinblack25 (talk · contribs) 03:39, 5 April 2025 (UTC)
Greetings. I've started reviewing the article. The article appears to be in good shape and only some relatively minor grammar issues have stood out to me. I will post comments after I've finished the review. (Guyinblack25 talk 03:39, 5 April 2025 (UTC))
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
The article is in great shape. The only things that stood out to me are marked on hold below.
- Is it well written?
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- Commas are a recurring issue throughout the article.
- Per MOS:SERIAL, a serial/oxford comma is not required in serial lists. The article needs to use it consistently though, and I saw both uses. Not sure which one appears more often, so I'll leave it up to you as to which style to use. Some examples:
- "...assault rifles, sniper rifles and submachine..."; "...gun turrets, shields and combat drones..."
- "..gear, XP, and blueprints.."; "The Agent, JTF, and the Civilian..."
- There are also instances of a comma used before a conjunction when the second part is a dependent clause rather than an independent clause. I may fix those myself since they are simple fixes; double check any of my edits in case I change the meaning.
- There are many complex sentences that pack a lot of information. Nothing wrong with well-written complex sentences, but I recommend swapping out some of the comma pairs for parentheses and dashes to help the reader parse the information more easily. Alternatively, breaking up some of the complex sentences into multiple simple sentences isn't a bad idea either, but it looks like you're going for FA-class well-written prose, so whichever you think is the best route.
- I saw a few sentences that had commas after adjectives. This is should be done when the order of the adjectives in a similar category can be swapped. Based on my knowledge of gaming, the cases below don't seem to fit that description.
- "The Division 2 is a cover-based, third-person shooter..."
- "The Division 2 also includes a traditional, competitive, multiplayer mode named Conflict..."
- Per MOS:SERIAL, a serial/oxford comma is not required in serial lists. The article needs to use it consistently though, and I saw both uses. Not sure which one appears more often, so I'll leave it up to you as to which style to use. Some examples:
- Last recommendation for the prose is to provide a brief explanation of what "endgame" is. I've never played such games before and had to look it up. I'm sure other laymen won't know the term either.
- Commas are a recurring issue throughout the article.
- B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
- Passed spot checking
- C. It contains no original research:
- Passed spot checking
- D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
- Passed spot checking
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- Is it neutral?
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- Is it stable?
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- A caption for the cover art would be good. This is a chance to point out elements illustrated in the cover that are explicitly discussed in the article. The setting, player classes, and weapons come to mind. ALT text for accessibility would be good for all the images in the article as well.
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- On hold while the few issues are addressed. Please let me know if you need additional information about the points above.
- Pass or Fail:
I will check back later. Overall, very good job, and the article is almost there. (Guyinblack25 talk 23:54, 5 April 2025 (UTC))