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Nominator: Premeditated Chaos (talk · contribs) 23:26, 17 February 2025 (UTC)
Reviewer: MSincccc (talk · contribs) 15:35, 24 February 2025 (UTC)
- I will review the article soon. Regards. MSincccc (talk) 15:37, 24 February 2025 (UTC)
- GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose, spelling, and grammar):
- a (prose, spelling, and grammar):
b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 
- It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check.
- a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Comments
- Prose
- Lead
- Could "finally" be dropped from this sentence:
The collection is based on the idea of exiles travelling eastward through northern Eurasia: Siberia, Tibet, and finally Japan.
- It implies a sequence, so I'll keep it
- Concept and creative process
- Although placed in the Russian section of the show, the paneled structure of Look 12 is reminiscent of samurai armour. It should be "panelled" in British English. MSincccc (talk) 14:32, 26 February 2025 (UTC)
- Done
- There were also draped and empire-waist designs/silhouettes. Adding "designs" or "silhouettes" ensures grammatical correctness and clarity.
- Lost a word somewhere, fixed
- Reception
- Andrew Wilson reported that the... Could "wrote" be used in place of "reported" in this case since Wilson's commentary came from a written source rather than a live source (eg. a news report)?
- Reported does not strictly mean live news reporting
- Could Charlie Porter and Suzy Menkes be linked in this sentence:
- Suzy Menkes of International Herald Tribune and Charlie Porter of The Guardian both thought...
- Done
- in her Washington Post review... Could "in her review for the Washington Post" be used here?
- It could, but the version that is there is also valid, so there's no reason to change it.
- Legacy
- Look 33 was photographed for Vogue by Thomas Schenk.
- Vogue could be linked here as it has not been done anywhere else in the article's prose.
- Integrated the Vogue review in the reception section so it's linked higher up
- Premeditated Chaos This concludes my list of suggestions for improvements/revisions to the article's prose. Regards. MSincccc (talk) 13:52, 28 February 2025 (UTC)
- @Premeditated Chaos Would you like me to conduct a source-to-text spot check for the article? I look forward to your response. MSincccc (talk) 05:33, 1 March 2025 (UTC)
- A spot check is mandatory per the Good Article review instructions, so yes, you should. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 06:25, 1 March 2025 (UTC)
- @Premeditated Chaos Would you like me to conduct a source-to-text spot check for the article? I look forward to your response. MSincccc (talk) 05:33, 1 March 2025 (UTC)
Images
- I would suggest adding alt text to all the images.
- Done
Source-to-text spot check
- Comments to follow soon. MSincccc (talk) 10:38, 2 March 2025 (UTC)
- 1-
Done - 7- Done
- References 8 and 23 are from the same article.
- Fixed
- 9- Done
- The set for his Autumn/Winter 1999 collection The Overlook had depicted an isolated winter landscape. Reference 13 only mentions "winter" in its text. Reference 14 mentions "isolated" on page no. 270 and "landscape" on page no. 155.
- 1-
- MSincccc (talk) 16:53, 2 March 2025 (UTC)
- References do not have to contain the exact words used in the text to support what is written in our articles. Editors must paraphrase and summarize, especially when the language used by sources would be descriptive and editorial. Please read ref 14, which clearly describes the set as follows: "the snow-covered runway, with its thousand scented candles, was set behind plexiglass walls, a sound track of howling wolves and whistling wind creating the atmosphere". In other words: an isolated winter landscape. I have expanded slightly to note the inspiration from The Shining, but otherwise I feel this is adequately supported by the refs. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 19:04, 2 March 2025 (UTC)
- 25- Done
- 69-
Scanners is mentioned nowhere in the cited article's text. Done - 78- Done
- 25-
- MSincccc (talk) 19:20, 4 March 2025 (UTC)
- Did you read ref 69, or did you Ctrl+F for the word "Scanners" and call it a day? ♠PMC♠ (talk) 19:55, 4 March 2025 (UTC)
- Sorry, PMC. I did read through the article but overlook the fact that the collection is referred to as "autumn/winter 03". I will be more careful in the future. MSincccc (talk) 04:12, 5 March 2025 (UTC)
- 7-It is missing a paywall tag.
- References do not have to contain the exact words used in the text to support what is written in our articles. Editors must paraphrase and summarize, especially when the language used by sources would be descriptive and editorial. Please read ref 14, which clearly describes the set as follows: "the snow-covered runway, with its thousand scented candles, was set behind plexiglass walls, a sound track of howling wolves and whistling wind creating the atmosphere". In other words: an isolated winter landscape. I have expanded slightly to note the inspiration from The Shining, but otherwise I feel this is adequately supported by the refs. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 19:04, 2 March 2025 (UTC)
- 13-It is also missing a paywall tag; only a limited no. of premium Vogue articles can be accessed by non-subscribers.
- 32-Same as reference 13.
- 33-I was unable to access it through ProQuest.
- 34-I wass unable to access it through ProQuest. I can access it through this link, though-https://www.smh.com.au/lifestyle/fashion/fur-flys-on-the-catwalk/20030310-gdgeei.html (using this link would require you to add a paywall tag)
- Can access reference 39 here but not through the ProQuest link in the article. (The url I can access will require you to use a paywall tag.)
- 57-I was unable to access it through ProQuest.
- 58-Same as above.
- 70-This one requires a paywall tag.
I hope my comments have been constructive. Regards. MSincccc (talk) 06:53, 5 March 2025 (UTC)
- Paywall tags are not mandatory, even at the FAC level, and I have never found much value in adding them. ProQuest links should work for you if you log in to ProQuest through the Wikipedia Library. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 07:42, 5 March 2025 (UTC)
- Apologies for prolonging this review. Regards. MSincccc (talk) 08:04, 5 March 2025 (UTC)
- Paywall tags are not mandatory, even at the FAC level, and I have never found much value in adding them. ProQuest links should work for you if you log in to ProQuest through the Wikipedia Library. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 07:42, 5 March 2025 (UTC)
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