Talk:SMS Nautilus (1871)/GA1

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Nominator: Parsecboy (talk · contribs) 23:27, 6 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 20:43, 21 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take a look at this. Review to follow shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 20:43, 21 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

No duplicated links
File:SMS Albatros (IZ 1872-109 n HPenner).jpg Needs a US PD tag which should be fine as this was published in 1872, other images correctly licensed
Article is stable
Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

"Her third and final tour in the Pacific began..." Suggest rejigging this sentence to make it chronological
Lede says her Pacific tour ended in 1888 but she moved to African waters in 1887, which doesn't work
Suggest adding in the image caption that Albatross is a sister ship
You say Kaiserliche Werft in the infobox but Königlich Werft in main text
The range figures don't appear to be in the main text (and thus not cited)

While the lede says the ships were ordered by the Imperial Navy, this section says it was the Prussian Navy (and there is no mention of the Imperial Navy outside of the lede)
"which were intended" > "which was intended"

What's the fleet plan of 1867? With everything in the article so far suggesting she would be a gunboat from the off, this was a surprising turn!
"4 June 1873" duplicated year
"On 8 August..." awkward to begin a paragraph with a date - every paragraph in First deployment to the Pacific also begins in this way
"senior ~~officer~~ of the two captains"
"the ships returned to Santander the fall" capital T missing at the start of this sentence, and possibly a word missing towards the end here
Link consuls
"to she conduct surveys" needs a rejig
"~~But~~ a typhoon struck Yokohama"
If we can't name the captain of Elizabeth it might be best to remove the reference to avoid confusion, as right now one might read this and believe Valois to be that captain
Do we know what the "intervention to prevent attacks" was?
"through the 16th" for consistency suggest changing to "through 16 September"
"the power struggle..." Some context is needed here - what power struggle where, and why does is this relevant to Nautilus?
"She then departed" > "Nautilus then departed"
The impact on the formation of German South West Africa is interesting - is there any information on what exactly in the report impacted this?
"re-designated as a cruiser" should this be a link to cruiser?
"On 13 August, Nautilus}" sp
"on the 15th" ibid previous suggestion on dates
There's some deviation in whether you capitalise "Cruiser Squadron" or not?
"later to visit Japan" > "later visited Japan"

References look good. There is an overwhelming reliance on Hildebrand, Röhr, & Steinmetz, which I think would stop this article from going any higher than GA, but the source itself appears reliable and of good quality.
In looking to expand the amount of sources used in the article I found the following, which you might find useful in fleshing out the article a little:

[1] Preparing for Weltpolitik: German Sea Power Before The Tirpitz Era, Lawrence Sondhaus (1997)
[2] Bismarck and British Colonial Policy: The Problem of South West Africa, 1883–1885, William Aydelotte (1974)
[3] The Partition of Africa, John Keltie (1893)
[4] Pacific Strife: The Great Powers and their Political and Economic Rivalries in Asia and the Western Pacific, 1870–1914, Kees van Dijk (2015)