Talk:Pilot (Arrested Development)/GA1

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Nominator: Crystal Drawers (talk · contribs) 20:47, 6 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk · contribs) 03:44, 7 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Hey! I will be reviewing this article :) I look forward to reading it as it seems very interesting! I am going to do a thorough review soon but for now I have three points

1.) The plot summary is too long - it should be less than 400 words per the requirement. Done

2.) "On the next Arrested Development..."- This should be removed as it is not part of the plot Done (but I feel it is needed)

3.) This sentence in "Accolades" - "The pilot was honored at the 56th Annual Primetime Emmy Awards. Mitchell Hurwitz won Outstanding Writing for a Comedy Series for writing the pilot episode. During his acceptance speech, Hurwitz joked, "This is such a huge honor and, I fear, a giant mistake."" - is unsourced - please source it (also, I am not sure of the relevance of the acceptance speech?) Done (sourced statements and removed speech)

I will do a thorough review either tomorrow or later this week, so please expect new comments soon... DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 03:44, 7 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments! I’ll fix these later today. Just one thing, the "On the Next" section is a part of every Arrested Development episode page, as it is a part of every single episode. One thing to note is that these are more one off jokes if anything, as none of what happens in these ever occurs in the next episode, and so they are unique moments from each episode. What happens on these usually does affect the next episode’s plot, so I think having it is a necessity. For now, I have removed it, and I’m fine with that, but I would prefer to keep it Crystal Drawers (talk) 11:04, 7 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, I hope you are well! I reviewed the rest of the article. Here are my comments:

Lead - can you please remove the quotes and paraphrase them instead? Done And also can you add the actors' names next to the characters (e.g. George Sr. (Jeffrey Tambor)) please? Done

Plot -"This is too much for Michael" - What does this mean? Also regarding the plot, I have struggled to understand some of it and I feel that some of it may not be understandable to readers who do not know the subject, so maybe if you could please try clarifying some things? Done (reworded previously mentioned sentence and made certain parts of the section easier to read)

Development:

1.) "resulting from repeated rewritings and rehearsals" - I am a bit confused by what this means? Done (reworded)

2.) " "squarely in the zeitgeist"" - What does this mean? Done (tried to reword in a more digestible manner)

3.) Please link the "Fox" company Done

4.) "as a put pilot with a six-figure penalty" - What is a "put pilot" and what does "six-figure penalty" mean? Done (reworded to best of my ability; also, to answer your question, a put pilot is when a network agrees to buy a television pilot without being able to intervene, and the penalty is that if they choose not to air it, they are forced to pay a penalty for this. I tried to reword the sentence to also include the description, but it may come off rather awkward to read)

Themes and analysis - "The attitude of "Pilot" has been described as an "early adapter to the changing economic mood [towards America] in the 2000s" - Described by whom? Done

Reception:

1.) ""Pilot" was well received with critics, notably for its deadpan humor and lack of a laugh track. The New York Times critic Alessandra Stanley wrote that any possible comparisons to The Royal Tenenbaums were unfair, noting that Arrested Development dropped the "highbrow precociousness" of that film." - Both these sentences need sources. Done

2.) "Tim Goodman" of which newspaper/website etc? Done

3.) "while lauding Bateman's performance as "stunningly great"." - This needs a ref Done

Also can you please link Vulture in the sources themselves? Done

Once these are done I will do another check. Well done for your work on it so far! DaniloDaysOfOurLives (talk) 19:26, 14 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@DaniloDaysOfOurLives: thanks for the comments! I fixed all that you’ve asked, and have left short comments on some of your notes just in case of anything. Thanks again! I hope you are doing well :) Crystal Drawers (talk) 20:01, 14 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]

DaniloDaysOfOurLives hey, how’s it going? Have you had a chance to do another check of the article yet? Sorry to be a bother, I’m just checking in :)

no worries if you can’t right now! Crystal Drawers (talk) 10:52, 22 April 2025 (UTC)[reply]