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GA review

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Passed. 750h+ 02:40, 24 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Nominator: EF5 (talk · contribs) 14:15, 5 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: 750h+ (talk · contribs) 10:16, 20 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Hi i'll start reviewing this shortly. If i don't start within the next four days ping me. 750h+ 10:16, 20 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@EF5: will start reviewing. 750h+ 06:15, 23 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

lead
  • across the United States in late-April 2024 is the hyphen between "late" and "April" needed?
From what I've seen with other tornado articles, yes. EF5 14:38, 23 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
  • killing one person who was sheltering inside of a sports lounge. == "killing one person who was sheltering inside a sports lounge."
 Done.
meteorological synopsis
  • towns of Ardmore, Holdenville, Marietta, Okemah and Sulphur add a comma after "Okemah"
 Done.
  • Shortly before this storm became tornado the ==> "Shortly before this storm became tornado, the"
 Done.
  • the SPC issued mesoscale discussion highlighting ==> "the SPC issued a mesoscale discussion highlighting"
 Done.
  • towns of Ardmore, Holdenville, Marietta and Okemah add a comma after "Marietta"
 Done.
  • Prior to the tornado touching down, five simultaneous ==> "Before the tornado touching down, five simultaneous"
  • Three of these warning had attached ==> "Three of these warnings had attached"
 Done.
  • Gene Autry, Mill Creek, Roff, Springer and Hickory ==> "Gene Autry, Mill Creek, Roff, Springer, and Hickory"
 Done.
tornado summary
  • trees along Veterans Lake Road, before rapidly intensifying remove the comm
 Done.
  • As it left downtown Sulphur, impacting East June Avenue and Hickory Street ==> "It left downtown Sulphur, impacting East June Avenue and Hickory Street"
 Done.
  • came within a close proximity of ==> "came within proximity of"
 Done.
aftermath
  • April 28, Oklahoma governor Kevin Stitt capitalise "Governor".
 Done.
  • Counties declared as being under ==> "Counties declared under"
 Done.
  • Murray, Okfuskee, Oklahoma, Payne and Pontotoc add a comma after 'Payne'.
 Done.
  • Aid and disaster response was sent to ==> "Aid and disaster response were sent to"
 Done.

Sources and image are fine. There are few grammar mistakes, which I've noted above. Address my concerns above @EF5: and i'll be happy to pass the article. 750h+ 06:15, 23 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@750h+: Issues addressed, how's it look? EF5 14:38, 23 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
happy to pass 750h+ 02:38, 24 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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